Critique No. 1 result

Here is the presentation I showed my class

Here are the comments I was given

• You work looks really good bethany! Think your question is fine at the moment but it is definitely a great improvement from your last one.
• What are your artist models? Do you have an example of what your end product might look like like a movie scene using the method you're chosen to use?
• Realistically can you do your animation in the time remaining of you add wind?
• Question refinement working well. Keep going. Inclusion of wind - good analysis of why. How about an analysis on light as well?
• Great project. Can't wait to see finished product :)
• Maybe play around with colour in this stage before animating as that is your question, so you really want to get that right.
• Great Development. Looks fantastic, love the inclusion of wind. Whats the story. What makes it happy or sad and how does it change our viewing?
• I have no idea what I'm doing but I love your work. I'm distracted
• Good progress, more visual couldn't hurt. Keep it up
• Perhaps you should experiment more on the different colour for lighting instead of added wind fx because it's not relevant to your question. Other than that, GOOD WORK!
• I like the question! It clearly gives the intention of what your trying to accomplish. I know its a rough plan but I like the style!
• Nice work - Keep going. Project is looking good, can't wait to see colour. Maybe make the story a bit clearer? Words?
• I wonder what software was used to animate clean animatic? You have done a recent amount of progress so far.
• Good work. Looking forward to see the final :)
• I think your research question you have developed now is very specific. I like the idea of the colours being identified by what mood it will give the viewers.

I like the advice, notes, ideas and encouragement I have received

From this;

• I take note of the advice on beginning the colour experimenting now instead of when I am animating. I think this make perfect sense and will make my life way easier.
• Also, some people were questioning on whether I should make the story clearer with adding words and I will not follow this advice because its the colour alone that will indicate any sort of story, also the story can only be formed though the imagination of others for there is no real story.
• Some people encourage the wind and some question why I have included it at all. I have induced it due to it being able to add more highlight on the character and the setting itself. But I will consider taking the wind out if it causes to much hassle and time as, just a fact, it's not really relevant to my research question. It's a detail to up my work to the second year level.