Treatment
I have come up with a treatment to my story
“Notated Brothers”
Bethany Hayes
FADE In:
INT. ROOM – MORNING
Bethany finishes
drawing, happy with the result. Her sister TRINITY walks over behind her.
Trinity
‘Hey, new drawing?’
Bethany
Cheerfully
‘Ya, I just finished’
Bethany moves out of the way to show
Trinity the drawing. Trinity gets an idea.
Trinity
Confidently
‘Ohh!! Cool! They would make the best
enemies! That one makes the perfect bad guy. I can see their epic fight now.’
Trinity gets excited over her idea. Bethany
is surprised by Trinity’s idea.
Bethany
Shyly
‘OK, well… But what’
Both sisters are interrupted by strange yet
fantastic glowing around Bethany’s drawing in front of them. Both sisters stare
shocked yet silently as two figures emerge, seeming large.
The glowing suddenly stops, revealing two
cute mini versions of the drawings Bethany has finished (FLUTE and CLARINET).
An awkward atmosphere rises, until Trinity breaks the awkwardness.
Trinity
Excitement builds
‘Ahhhh, this, is, Amazing!’
Bethany
‘Ehhh?!?’
Trinity
‘Now we can see them fight epically! Go on.
FIGHT!’
As if commanded, the Flute and Clarinet get
into an epic pose, commutating with each other in an unknown language (shows
the translation with subtitles).
Flute
‘I wish not to harm thee.’
Clarinet
‘Ha, and that’s why you shall lose!’
Both drawings engage in a cute mini fight,
both seeming evenly matched. Both sisters stare, wide eyed, Trinity gets more
excited over the fight well Bethany seems more shaken.
Bethany
‘I… I saw them as siblings…’
Trinity
‘Oh, that’s even better!’
Showing the drawings prospective, the fight
is not just a cute little fight, but in their world, it is life or death. Flute
misjudges his punch and Clarinet get a good hit on him. Flute falls before
Clarinet as Clarinet stares down menacingly.
Flute
‘Why… What have I ever done to you?! I’ve
always look up to you!’
Clarinet
‘Of course you have. You’re my Little
Brother!’
Clarinet goes to finish his brother off.
Trinity with stars in her eyes.
Trinity
‘Yes! Finish Him!’
Bethany stares at Trinity as if she is a
mad man.
Bethany
‘No!! Wait!’
The drawings freeze and Trinity looks
disappointed at Bethany.
Bethany
‘I just finished drawings them, I don’t want
them to DIE now!’
Trinity
‘While what are they gonna do then?? That
was pretty cool till you ruined it.’
Bethany thinks quickly then reveal what she
thought the drawings were in the first place.
Bethany
‘It’s just, their not enemies. Their
brothers. And their good brothers to each other.’
The two drawings look back at each other.
Flute
Shyly
‘Brother…’
Clarinet
Sniff’s with tear in eye
‘Brother!’
Both drawings hug each other close is a
bro-hug. Trinity stares as Bethany laughs, Trinity cracks a smile due to
Bethany’s laughter.
Trinity
‘OK fine… But what can they kill instead?’
Bethany
‘Trinity!’
Trinity
‘What?? I like them killing things.’
The glowing around the draws reappears as
both sisters look back to the drawings. Bethany smirks and Trinity laughs.
It reveals the two drawings back where they
came from fighting a rock together as a family.
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